Middle School
The following is a student draft. It may contain errors. (1) A nature lover and local politician in the area had been trying for three years to capture the moose on video. (2) He finally got footage of the moose crossing a river and walking through tall grass. (3) Wandering the southwest region of Sweden is a mysterious white moose. (4) While other moose are typically dark brown or black, this rare moose looks almost entirely white, with soft white velvet coating, even on its antlers. (5) Many believed that the moose's white coloring was a result of a condition called albinism. (6) This is a condition that causes the loss of pigment, or color in skin, hair, and fur. (7) It is now believed that moose with this white fur have a recessive gene that causes white fur with specks of brown. (8) While this condition is totally rare, these weird white moose continue to pop up across Europe. (9) Their population is increasing in Europe, as moose in this area face few natural predators. (10) In order to protect these ghostly creatures, hunters have chosen to avoid these animals, effectively protecting them, allowing the populations to grow. (11) These white moose have also been seen in various areas of Alaska and Canada but are most common in the vast forests of Sweden and Norway in Europe. (12) With the number of predators, such as bears and wolves, in North America, it is unlikely that the populations of white moose will increase too much. (13) The animals' white fur keep them from being able to camouflage themselves in the forest, making them easy prey.How could sentence 11 be revised to convey the idea more precisely?A. Found in the cold of Alaska and Canada too, these weird white moose are most common in the vast forests of Sweden and Norway in Europe.B. These white moose have also been seen all over the state of Alaska and the country of Canada but are most common in Sweden and Norway.C. These white moose have been seen in Alaska and Canada, but they are most common in Sweden and Norway, which are in Europe.D. These moose, while most common in Sweden and Norway, have also been seen in Alaska and Canada.